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from ted27/Ted (41,321)  
on May 25, 2012 8:58:45 AM CDT
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A depressive mood that the B&W fits perfectly. The lack of eye contact and blowing hair works well. If you wanted to show depression, then someone depressed, would not be confidently locking eyes with the viewer. The plastic props, head piece and pinwheel and the manner she is clutching the pinwheel brings in the feel of un-natural and artificial. And the bridge, bold and dark holds the location is foreboding and seemingly impossible to conquer... for a single person. The sky holds a dramatic dark day without contrast. This image exhibits a lot of creative preplanning I find excellent. My only suggestion is the bottom border is cropped a bit too tight, your model's forearms are almost on the border. >TED
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From serjiohifi/Serjio (188)
on May 25, 2012 9:24:45 AM CDT
Thank You! You have correctly understood the mood of this photo - I'm very happy about it!
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from maxart/Max (81,757)
on May 25, 2012 7:51:54 AM CDT
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Pretty girl and lots of accessories and even an interesting setting. But for me it does not have much impact. The hat and thing are fun, her expression says otherwise all dressed up and no one to take her ? I am not sure, but I think I would have liked eye contact, but then I am a great fan of Arbus. Technically it is a matter of taste, I prefer more punch. ;o)-max-
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from railhead/Mike (14,662)
on May 25, 2012 4:34:37 AM CDT
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i think you chose wisely doing this in black and white. i think it would have looked "cheap" in color. there are a few stray "hairs" or "spiderwebs" or something running vertically on both sides of the girl. i don't know what it'd be exactly, but it could be photoshopped out.
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From serjiohifi/Serjio (188)
on May 25, 2012 4:38:26 AM CDT
Thank You! I shot this picture on the film - had very love photography in BW. As for minor defects - I do not pay attention to them and not try to make the photo "glossy".
Best regards!
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from beegirl/Mieka (2,879)
on May 25, 2012 4:07:09 AM CDT
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if she had only left this plastic stuff at home! this is a very deep emotional look in her face, the hair is perfect in the wind, the plain dress is very well chosen, but that stuff on her hair can if so only be real flowers. best would be limp flowers that show how long she maybe waits already!
the plastic stuff makes it look like some crazy gay fashion designers idea, who had his best times in the eighties.
a pair of old workers shoes in her hands, would leave space for emotions and thoughts.
but still a great picture with almost all perfect.
thanks for sharing it!
mieka
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From serjiohifi/Serjio (188)
on May 25, 2012 4:29:15 AM CDT
Thank you for your critique. We live in an industrial town and wanted to show that soon we will not live a little and beautiful - just rubbish and waste.
Cheers!)))
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from michal235/Michal (123,404)
on May 25, 2012 4:02:46 AM CDT
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Expression is serious and natural. There are some hairs on face, however in my opinion it looks more natural. Good B&W portrait work. However I'm not sure till the end about this industrial building which is situated on the left suide of photo near your model's head, is it intentional here. Use Curves in Photoshop could help you here with add more brightness for some dark areas here, especially on your model's face, of course if it will be necessary. Personally I would prefer to try to make one or two steps on the left side and rotate camera few degrees to the right. Eventually your model could make one or two steps to the left side, because it coul help here with eliminate tthis building which is situted on the left side of photo from this scene, however this is my opinion only, because I understand that maybe it was your intention here to compose this photo as it is. Regards, Michal.
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From serjiohifi/Serjio (188)
on May 25, 2012 4:34:57 AM CDT
Thank you! I like this arrangement of objects in the frame - the photo is not meant as something fun - on the contrary wanted to show our reality.
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