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from rayjitsu/Ray (201) 
on September 27, 2012 8:54:14 AM CDT
Good catch.
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from afshin1/Afshin (1,244)
on May 9, 2012 8:57:54 AM CDT
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Hi Mike--I like your idea, nice shot ,but you can speak stronger...go forward or use a closer lens,in my opinion, the left and down side,are not very important--take the sitting man in 1/3 down left and use more of reflection in glass.The ceiling lamps detracts a bit too.Gooood luck.
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From mikewebb/Mike (13,820) 
on May 9, 2012 9:18:49 AM CDT
The glass is rather embarrassing as I managed to get the camera strap in the way otherwise I think those reflections would have given other opportunities. I am still coming to terms with the Fuji X100 which has a lovely optical viewfinder. Mike
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from michal235/Michal (123,370)
on May 9, 2012 7:29:15 AM CDT
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Hi Mike. Generally I would prefer to try to make a little bit more close up photo of this sitting person with this bilboard in background. I'm not sure till end about this dark area which is situated on the foreground, this is my opinion. Regards, Michal.
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From mikewebb/Mike (13,820)
on May 9, 2012 9:17:01 AM CDT
You'll see from other comments I hoped the empty and sometimes dark space would emphasise the loneliness of this guy.
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from fritzsolms/Fritz (6,704)
on May 9, 2012 7:25:21 AM CDT
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Interesting photo, Mike
The loneliness of the person is contrasted against the vibrant social scene in the poster behind him. His only interaction with society is through the computer. That loneliness is strengthened by the large amount of space and the natural vignetting effect provided by the darker surrounding. I think the composition could potentially be improved. I would move close, starting the frame at the corner of the first brick block (the diamonds providing a lead-in), crop out the right hand side door and the roof up to the start of the shiny area.
Thanks for sharing
Fritz
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From mikewebb/Mike (13,820)
on May 9, 2012 9:15:59 AM CDT
You got the idea I was going for. I think this would look better much bigger but I'll play with your suggestion. Mike
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from portemr/Rosario (13,043)
on May 9, 2012 7:09:13 AM CDT
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Certainly the moment you've captured here is interesting, Mike. However I would like to see the man sitting on the bench, with greater clarity. Compositionally, I would crop a good portion of the left side of the picture. Have you tried it in black and white? Regards, Rosario.
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From mikewebb/Mike (13,820)
on May 9, 2012 9:08:26 AM CDT
I did try it in B&W and it was less clear, the colours in the background were intended to emphasis the rather lonely nature of the chap tapping away at his PC in a deserted space. So all that space and colour around him was a deliberate choice. Mike
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From finisterre/Elise (478)
on May 9, 2012 10:14:14 AM CDT
I think you succeeded in your aim perfectly. Your image made me feel deeply for this man. Fritz summed it up very well in his critique, and I think that the CCTV camera pointing at him adds another layer of alienation - the idea that he's being watched at a distance by anonymous eyes.
Your photo also made me think about how the camera can lie to beautiful effect. In reality your subject may be a sociable man with a large family, but you've transformed him into a symbol for loneliness that can make people feel really sad for him. It's a kind of transformation that's common knowledge for most photographers, but still a kind of magic to someone new to the art like me. I like photos like yours that make me think :)
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From mikewebb/Mike (13,820)
on May 9, 2012 12:52:00 PM CDT
To a certain extent a shot like this is a cheap shot for as you say this guy may be the life and soul of any party. Having passed by him quite closely I rather doubt it but how could I know.
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From finisterre/Elise (478)
on May 9, 2012 1:29:00 PM CDT
I'm so sorry if I made it seem like a criticism - my intention was quite the opposite. I remarked on it because your photo made me think about how intriguing it is that the way we shoot our images can change reality. It's about making photos as opposed to expecting them to be ready-made, so that regardless of what the man is really like you've creatively transformed him into a lonely man deserving of pity and thereby set the whole mood of the scene.
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