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from facewithered/Puchong (9,650) 
on April 25, 2009 9:55:43 AM CDT
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Hi Dan, it's been a while since I wrote a comment on one of your past images. As in the previous one, I was fascinated with the nature bearing a train in it. Here a train acts like a spiritual bullet passing through my mind. I like the way you shoot trains. In your picture trains don't stay as a mere subject matter. You seem to describe or write down trains from your heart because the whole scene contains lots of things in it. But in this case, I would suggest shooting at a lower angle to magnify some flowers and removing upper half. Making flower bed look dominant and the train and railways marginal to the edge would make this image much powerful and thoughtful. To get this I would move a few more steps to the right. This is my taste and still yours stand good as your own way, Puchong
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From indecline/Dan (2,514)
on April 25, 2009 12:39:29 PM CDT
Puchong - some good suggestions. As noted below, I may try again if everything cooperates. Dan
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from quisqualis/JULIE (3,603)
on April 25, 2009 9:26:04 AM CDT
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Balsa Root...is it related to Balsa Wood? Nice view; you might up the saturation. Wondering why the flowers don't grow on the other side of the highway? I like your train.
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From indecline/Dan (2,514)
on April 25, 2009 12:38:19 PM CDT
It's a yellow flower. They seem to be very selective where they grow. This was the largest clump I could find that were somewhat near the tracks.
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from photocrit/Eain (3,247)
on April 25, 2009 8:35:54 AM CDT
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I do not understand the reference to Balsa Root but here is a suggestion: try a very tight portrait crop from just outside the ends of the bridge in the background. That will give the shot maximum impact and you will lose some quite ugly stuff on each flank. Otherwise exposure and colour combination are quite effective. Eain
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From baba/David (38,576)
on April 25, 2009 8:52:35 AM CDT
I was thinking the same thing. I can't really tell if there is more train off in the distance that may be cropped out with the vertical composition but at this size, it really does get rid of material which doesn't really help the image for me.
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From indecline/Dan (2,514)
on April 25, 2009 12:37:08 PM CDT
Balsa Root is the yellow flower. Vertical might work here - I was dealing with a deep cut where the train goes and I was trying to minimize the foreground in front of me - but I think I might be able to make it work as vertical by moving slightly to the right. If the weather is cooperative and the trains cooperate - I may give it another go tommorow. Dan
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