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from deadpixel/Joseph (144) 
on September 14, 2004 9:29:27 PM CDT
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Cute picture. :D Of the 3 i've seen so far I like this one the best. I'm always amazed people can do a selfportrait and get the compsition right. Could you do more and look into the camera with a similar expression. It's kinda "girl nextdoor" sexy but still innocent. Showing off just a little shoulder and making us wish we lived next door...
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from bigmc651/Mike (272)
on August 15, 2004 3:54:48 AM CDT
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You do quite well on both sides of the lens. Focus is a little soft for my taste.
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from forwardesign/Justin (260)
on April 23, 2004 3:12:48 AM CDT
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It looks a little flat. What I would try is less direct flash and more indirect light. You might try higher MM too, just to take the exageration of features away slightly. I would not look so drastically away from the camera, and if you do i would use those eye drops that shrink the blood vessels in your eyes so that your eyes look clearer.
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from bljones1/Bruce (2,557)
on March 26, 2004 2:28:03 AM CST
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It's a nice start. It's also a blessing to have a willing and cooperative model who is also attractive. The thought for the pose is great, very creatively presented. The off camera glance, the hair also a bit askance, the coy smirk, all make an interesting casual portrait that is generally flattering to the model. The areas in need of improvement are 1) lighting, this is too flat, it does not flatter you (the model). Only your feminine attractiveness makes it survive the glare of the harsh light. It appears to be a single on camera flash. Try bouncing it off the ceiling and or using a reflector for additional light. Window light is also great for a primary light with flash for filling shadows. If you have other bright bulb type lights they can add modeling and interest, especially if you shoot in B&W that won't reveal bad color temperature problems. Second, you do not say what kind of camera you are using, but this seems too fuzzy to be good. A crisper image is always better. Perhaps it's the lens, perhaps the focus. Focus on the central part of the face and keep it sharp. Save the vulgar gimmicky special effects crud like soft focus for later after you learn better. Thanks for sharing.
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from intransit/In (3,878)
on March 25, 2004 9:25:39 PM CST
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I looked at your first, and then this... why no, with due respect take another... take 20 or more... I wonder whether the model's eyes should be looking at her wrist... and not piercing the cam's lens... I rarely come to Psig... as got lost with the nudes etc... and moved elsewhere... but in this case move the sweater down, allow the whisps of flowing hair to fall... not as a mop... but as whisps upon and over the shoulders... increase the smirk... and get some of the high cheek bones to show up... and lastly try to soften the light... a candle does wonders... without a flash... bring out the i.e.MSP... and have fun...
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